Today in HUMAN, 7 Explorer have spent time critiquing the first drafts of our World War One poetry.
We used our ‘Be Kind, Be Specific and Be Helpful’ protocol to give each other quality feedback.
Florence really liked how Harvey had used the phrase ‘night and day…’ as it gave the impression that the war was never ending.
This is what Lilly had to say about Kristian’s poem:
‘I like your use of a hyperbole in Stanza 4, ‘I have already grown six feet taller.’
‘I also like your triadic cluster, ‘the hell, the sorrow, the pain…’ because it makes your poem heart-breaking.
Improving punctuation, adding alliteration and powerful similes were just some of the helpful comments that were suggested to help develop our work even further.
Time to crack on with draft 2 tomorrow…